Though there are beautiful phrases that stay with me, often the most effective passages are the ones that get me by the innards… I don’t even notice the words… most often they’re small, effectively used words.
Save the flowers for the date. Flowery language seldom serves narrative. It occasionally has a place in dialogue of certain kinds of characters.
If it serves the narrative, keep it. If it doesn’t, excise it.
dbjgold 
Though there are beautiful phrases that stay with me, often the most effective passages are the ones that get me by the innards… I don’t even notice the words… most often they’re small, effectively used words.
Save the flowers for the date. Flowery language seldom serves narrative. It occasionally has a place in dialogue of certain kinds of characters.
If it serves the narrative, keep it. If it doesn’t, excise it.
If necessary, exorcise it. 🙂
Posted January 28